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Old 08-30-2014, 05:47 PM   #1
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Marcristo vs JuiceMW

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@Marcristo
Juice, listen up - I've had time to contemplate,
You MW? shit, I'll start witta flashbang stun grenade
Student/teacher or holocaust bar, I can't differentiate,
So I compress them both, just to make Juice (jews), concentrate

You look like the bodybuilder type, so how can this bodybuilder type?
with those blown up pythons? Fuck that, just take Sir Mix a Lot's advice,
You in the gym, I'm showering with your honey, giving her the pipe
My anaconda spread her pussy wide, while your working on your tri's

So if you bench pressin, and this man stressin, then I'll spot you
your hoe text me, and like loe pesci I let the bar drop through
I came quickly, then I came quickly, cause your girl been doing squats too
and again, whilst youre red in the face, i facefucked her til my cock blew

'MW' makes my name flips, shameless, because either way up its the same shit
This heinous, bane- rip off, came ripped, fiending for a vein hit
you think that illmac glitch rap is lame bitch, that shit test my patience
So I test juice while juice testin..you'll be left in the VACUUM on some Frank Zane shit,


@Juicemw
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Let’s get it..

Just cuz its Mark vs Marc dont make this mirror match acceptable
I Bend bones like you flexible, just to crush your skeletal,
It’s time to feast, so Marc ‘bout to get eaten like he edible,
Cuz What I spray turn Cristo to Crisco, that’s all vegetable.

Crisco, see how I prep before I straight cook him?
Call my pistol Earthquake the way it straight shook em,
So when the heat’s to your grill, there ain’t no savin ya’
High steaks beefin with me, that's Filet mignon,

Or I can get trilingual.. and just switch up the lingo,
like,” bienvenido mi amigo, this battle here’s finito”,
No travel plans here, I bring work to Marcristo
But you’ll still be sent packin from the punches island, montecristo.

But really thanks Marc, for lettin me empty my bladder,
I shit on you for 16, then used your corpse as a ladder,
So I dont need a corny slogan to end my bars right here,
I’ll just keep using PG’s bodies, to climb to top tier.
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Old 08-30-2014, 06:47 PM   #2
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Old 08-30-2014, 11:01 PM   #3
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Idk I feel like it's pretty close but I felt mars went a little to far into the bodybuilding stuff there's a lot that's been done with that concept and the angles didn't feel as fresh but you still had some good stuff

Juice had some nice punches thought some fell flat but the first four were fire IMO.. And both of you flowed real nice

But I think I'm going with juice based on bar strength and angles but the linked bar (I didn't click) fell flat.. Old school opinion that in a real battle there are no links
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Old 08-31-2014, 06:31 PM   #6
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Old 08-31-2014, 07:25 PM   #7
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@Marcristo
Juice, listen up - I've had time to contemplate,
You MW? shit, I'll start witta flashbang stun grenade
ok, don't think anyone has done a mw/modern warfare idea so that was cool but feel it was just a little jab rather than a hard punch
Student/teacher or holocaust bar, I can't differentiate,
So I compress them both, just to make Juice (jews), concentrate
jucie/concentrate bars have been done to death, take a bit of time to go back and check your opponents previous battles
You look like the bodybuilder type, so how can this bodybuilder type?
with those blown up pythons? Fuck that, just take Sir Mix a Lot's advice,
You in the gym, I'm showering with your honey, giving her the pipe
My anaconda spread her pussy wide, while your working on your tri's
this was a pretty good 4, nothing super heavy, but all nice, especially liked the bodybuilder type shit, could do with some multis to make shit hit harder though
So if you bench pressin, and this man stressin, then I'll spot you
your hoe text me, and like loe pesci I let the bar drop through
didn't really get the pecsi reference, are you trying to say forgetting your bars is letting the bar drop through?
I came quickly, then I came quickly, cause your girl been doing squats too
and again, whilst youre red in the face, i facefucked her til my cock blew
as a four bar the rhymes were better here, again I liked the I came quickly then came quickly was cool, lol at saying you cum quick any time though. Again the last line wasn't really hard hitting though, just all feels like little jabs, if your gonna use 3 lines to set up a final punch you wanna make it crazy, coz for the most part your opponents are gonna come with one two set up punch combos
'MW' makes my name flips, shameless, because either way up its the same shit
This heinous, bane- rip off, came ripped, fiending for a vein hit
the set up was fire, the second line felt like a set up more than the first though
you think that illmac glitch rap is lame bitch, that shit test my patience
So I test juice while juice testin..you'll be left in the VACUUM on some Frank Zane shit,
decent closer, also I mentioned you lacking mutlis early on but that soon changed as the verse moved on, you got some real nice rhymes and some good ideas just need to get some harder punches

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Marcristo

Let’s get it..

Just cuz its Mark vs Marc dont make this mirror match acceptable
I Bend bones like you flexible, just to crush your skeletal,
decent, rhymes are on point, punch wasn't super hard but it worked
It’s time to feast, so Marc ‘bout to get eaten like he edible,
Cuz What I spray turn Cristo to Crisco, that’s all vegetable.
punch was real nice, and ike the 4 bar rhyme scheme but that set up is bad, it would be like saying he's gonna get punched coz he's punchable
Crisco, see how I prep before I straight cook him?
Call my pistol Earthquake the way it straight shook em,
throwback mike will not approve of this, liked the set up more than the punch tbh
So when the heat’s to your grill, there ain’t no savin ya’
High steaks beefin with me, that's Filet mignon,
not a fan of this, also doesn't really rhyme for me
Or I can get trilingual.. and just switch up the lingo,
like,” bienvenido mi amigo, this battle here’s finito”,
I'll assume this is cool
No travel plans here, I bring work to Marcristo
But you’ll still be sent packin from the punches island, montecristo.
solid
But really thanks Marc, for lettin me empty my bladder,
I shit on you for 16, then used your corpse as a ladder,
So I dont need a corny slogan to end my bars right here,
I’ll just keep using PG’s bodies, to climb to top tier
nothing really hit in the 3 bar set up, but the punch was a nice closer


Jucie took it, marcristo keeps improving though, real solid battle...now go vote on me vs blanco in the main stage if you haven't already
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I was actually pretty happy about the loe pesci bar lmao. I admit it does require a little bit of a stretch so I appreciate the feedback. Glad you liked the MW either way up stuff, that shit corny but fun to write
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Yeah agree with alot of the comments. but i dont know i though mac had some dope shit going. ive never seen a battle from you so for a first impressiuon it was nice. but i think juice got you here. im not with the links to explain punches sorta thing. the way i see it if it goes over heads, all the better let it hit them later but i dont wanna have to stop readin to go on a wikipedia page or some shit. juice closer was dope as fuck aswell but really had no sting on it at all. definatley doe tho i like shit like that. so ima give this to juice purley on preference of style. marc came and did the thing tho. big up both ends. @Marcristo ive got next if you down. come catch the fade my guy. pause.
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@Marcristo
Juice, listen up - I've had time to contemplate,
You MW? shit, I'll start witta flashbang stun grenade
Semi light start. I liked the idea of the modern warfare punch but it wasn't very hard hitting
Student/teacher or holocaust bar, I can't differentiate,
So I compress them both, just to make Juice (jews), concentrate
This is pretty off to me. I get the double entendre but it's pretty wack

You look like the bodybuilder type, so how can this bodybuilder type?
with those blown up pythons? Fuck that, just take Sir Mix a Lot's advice,
Got me to chuckle. Not a super creative angle though
You in the gym, I'm showering with your honey, giving her the pipe
My anaconda spread her pussy wide, while your working on your tri's
Once again, the angle makes this punch pretty weak.

So if you bench pressin, and this man stressin, then I'll spot you
your hoe text me, and like loe pesci I let the bar drop through
haha i liked this
I came quickly, then I came quickly, cause your girl been doing squats too
and again, whilst youre red in the face, i facefucked her til my cock blew
Not a big fan of a bunch of "i fucked your girl" bars unless they are really creative, which this one is not

'MW' makes my name flips, shameless, because either way up its the same shit
This heinous, bane- rip off, came ripped, fiending for a vein hit
That setup was really really nice. Punch detracted from that for sure
you think that illmac glitch rap is lame bitch, that shit test my patience
So I test juice while juice testin..you'll be left in the VACUUM on some Frank Zane shit,
mmm first punch that really landed for me. Nice


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Marcristo

Let’s get it..

Just cuz its Mark vs Marc dont make this mirror match acceptable
I Bend bones like you flexible, just to crush your skeletal,
Rhyming nice, but pretty light on the punch
It’s time to feast, so Marc ‘bout to get eaten like he edible,
Cuz What I spray turn Cristo to Crisco, that’s all vegetable.
This would be really really nice if the setup wasn't so corny lol. Punch was fire though

Crisco, see how I prep before I straight cook him?
Call my pistol Earthquake the way it straight shook em,
Pretty light. Needed something else in the punch connecting to the setup to make it land for me
So when the heat’s to your grill, there ain’t no savin ya’
High steaks beefin with me, that's Filet mignon,
The rhyme is just a little bit off. Meh i guess it's close enough if you pronounce mignon a certain way. Kind of played out idea regardless.

Or I can get trilingual.. and just switch up the lingo,
like,” bienvenido mi amigo, this battle here’s finito”,
ooo this was lowkey poppin.
No travel plans here, I bring work to Marcristo
But you’ll still be sent packin from the punches island, montecristo.
ok, ok

But really thanks Marc, for lettin me empty my bladder,
I shit on you for 16, then used your corpse as a ladder,
This is pretty much filler
So I dont need a corny slogan to end my bars right here,
I’ll just keep using PG’s bodies, to climb to top tier.
This was a dope closer imo

This was a nice battle by my favorite PGer (juice) and my favorite new PGer(marc). Both of you have writing down well and just need to work on cutting out some of the filler and making your punches hit harder. Voting Juice because I felt like he had more punches land for me.
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This was a nice battle by my favorite PGer (juice) and my favorite new PGer(marc). Both of you have writing down well and just need to work on cutting out some of the filler and making your punches hit harder. Voting Juice because I felt like he had more punches land for me.
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nice battle, edge it to juice he had a nice ending
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No full breakdown for this one, but I edged it to Marcristo. Still, I didn't think it was a great showing from either. Marcristo's rhyme patterns are on point, but he just doesn't have the punches to really give his bars impact. I didn't like the extended "I'll fuck your girl" angle either. I thought the MW concept was dope and the closer was pretty cool, but everything else was pretty bland. I liked the Loe Pesci idea, but didn't think it was executed very well. It was pretty funny and had some nice imagery though, so it didn't fall totally flat.

Juice definitely has the right type of approach, throwing a lot more punches than Marcristo, but a lot of them fell pretty flat for me. I liked the "turn Cristo to Crisco" shit, but it wasn't executed very well imo. What does "that's all vegetable mean"? I thought something more could've been done with the concept--like saying you'd turn him to a vegetable at least. And the setup was weak. Tbh, none of these punches really landed for me. I thought the earthquake and Montecristo bars were really weak. I hate the "I call my gun ___" shit and the Montecristo bar was just a lose association between some island/I land wordplay and a vacation destination that sorta resembles Marcristo's name. I did like the closing four bars though. There were no crazy punches there or anything, but I liked the extended metaphor.

Honestly, I gave this to Marcristo just because I can't really justify voting for a verse where I felt like every punch fell flat. Marcristo didn't punch enough to do anything other than edge this by the slightest of margins, but I took not punching enough over consistently swinging and missing. It was a tough one to call either way though.

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@Throwback Mike Thanks for the clarification Mike. I'll clean it up for next time . I always mention you in my battles because I like the honest critique..

As for the All Vegetable, that was just because that's how they advertise Crisco. "All Vegetable"..because its an oil. BUt I can see where that could be cleaned up a bit anyways, and I hear you I guess on the not landing.
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@Throwback Mike Thanks for the clarification Mike. I'll clean it up for next time . I always mention you in my battles because I like the honest critique..

As for the All Vegetable, that was just because that's how they advertise Crisco. "All Vegetable"..because its an oil. BUt I can see where that could be cleaned up a bit anyways, and I hear you I guess on the not landing.
Ahh... I should've Googled "All Vegetable" with Crisco. I really liked that concept, so I wish I would've taken the time to figure that out. In any case, keep tagging me for your battles. You've got the right type of style down, the punches just weren't hitting for me here.
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@Marcristo
Juice, listen up - I've had time to contemplate,
You MW? shit, I'll start witta flashbang stun grenade
ok... 2/5
Student/teacher or holocaust bar, I can't differentiate,
So I compress them both, just to make Juice (jews), concentrate
right... ya this could have been worded a lot better. Feels like you came up with jews/juice then wrote down the first concept that came to your head. 2/5
You look like the bodybuilder type, so how can this bodybuilder type?
with those blown up pythons? Fuck that, just take Sir Mix a Lot's advice,
You in the gym, I'm showering with your honey, giving her the pipe
My anaconda spread her pussy wide, while your working on your tri's
right... 5/10

So if you bench pressin, and this man stressin, then I'll spot you
your hoe text me, and like loe pesci I let the bar drop through
I came quickly, then I came quickly, cause your girl been doing squats too
and again, whilst youre red in the face, i facefucked her til my cock blew
guess this was about as good as the last 4, but docking you a bit for staying on the same theme for 8 straight lines. 4/10

'MW' makes my name flips, shameless, because either way up its the same shit
This heinous, bane- rip off, came ripped, fiending for a vein hit
you think that illmac glitch rap is lame bitch, that shit test my patience
So I test juice while juice testin..you'll be left in the VACUUM on some Frank Zane shit,
You still on the same theme, but like I liked the test juice / juice testin wordplay and the setups were decent too. 6/10

Readability/Structure - 6.5/10 - you had some good rhyme structure here. showed a lot of potential.

overall 25.5/50 - would have been improved by taking some more time with your wording and by not sticking to one theme for the whole thing.


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Just cuz its Mark vs Marc dont make this mirror match acceptable
I Bend bones like you flexible, just to crush your skeletal,
It’s time to feast, so Marc ‘bout to get eaten like he edible,
Cuz What I spray turn Cristo to Crisco, that’s all vegetable.
the crisco line was decent. 'eaten like he edible' is one of the worst simile attempts I'e heard - no offense. The other bars read completely as random words you thought of that rhymed. 5/10

Crisco, see how I prep before I straight cook him?
Call my pistol Earthquake the way it straight shook em,
no this was pretty lame 1.5/5
So when the heat’s to your grill, there ain’t no savin ya’
High steaks beefin with me, that's Filet mignon,
heat/grill/beef is one of the all time most played concepts in battle rap tbh 2/5

Or I can get trilingual.. and just switch up the lingo,
like,” bienvenido mi amigo, this battle here’s finito”,
kinda creative, but not a lot of impact 2.5/5
No travel plans here, I bring work to Marcristo
But you’ll still be sent packin from the punches island, montecristo.
Is this just punches island (I land) - and then the word montecristo because it's an example of an island that has cristo in it? If so, that doesn't make much sense to me. my bad if I'm sleeping on something. 2/5

But really thanks Marc, for lettin me empty my bladder,
I shit on you for 16, then used your corpse as a ladder,
ok 2/5
So I dont need a corny slogan to end my bars right here,
I’ll just keep using PG’s bodies, to climb to top tier.[/QUOTE]
pretty weak closer man 2/5

Readability/Structure 5/10 - Nothing really wrong with it, but also nothing that really stood out. pretty straight forward setup punch format most of the way through.

Overall 22/50 - most of the punches were very light, and your attempts at wordplay didn't quite come off. If you try to use a double meaning, make sure that it actually does have two meanings. That bein said I liked that you tried some creative ideas even if it didn't quite come off this time.

I'm edging to marcristo
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