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Old 03-23-2015, 03:21 AM   #1
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RBL Season 2 Week 4: King John (1-1) vs. Shadow (0-2)

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Old 03-25-2015, 10:34 AM   #3
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Old 03-27-2015, 10:47 AM   #4
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Can I just post my bars in here anyway?
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Old 03-27-2015, 10:55 AM   #5
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Fuck it here goes



Verses like verbal diarrhoea, fitting King John died of dysentery,
Stop talking bout biscuits, I’ll have this cracker jacked so those gun bars are missing me,
If John got the big arms, he Johnny Bravo,
If he ever saw a buck, he Donnie Darko,
You’re gonna let what ring? You just a sweetheart – that’s Candy King,
I’ll make this comic book if he think he a Kingpin,
You’re a villain that rides on people? Nah you’re a bitch behind the mask like Harley Quinn,
I can see this man’s batty, he the Brokeback type – Bane in the sewer pit…
If you start acting crazy and making moves when I see you,
I’ll stretch him out and rush him with morphine (more fiends) like I.C.U
Throw King on the table if I don’t fold him is the plan,
Holding all the cards, King’s no match for me so I drop him off the hand.

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Old 03-27-2015, 12:16 PM   #6
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Old 03-27-2015, 06:31 PM   #7
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Ok my thoughts. I liked the usage of the word dysentery... sometimes you just wanna use a wacky word. Aside from playing Oregon trail though, I've never heard this word used in real life, but I think it's pronounced like diss-sen-tary, I don't think it would quite rhyme with with missing me. Still a cool concept though.

I liked the Kingpin bar, not amazing shit, but it's not easy to come up with a dope name flip like that on this site. Bane line was good shit too, I think if you took out the batty line, even though it fit the scheme, and put in a multi for brokeback type, it would've been a bit better though. Good closer, was gonna say adding something like "I'm not bluffing" would be good, but the holding all the cards is probably better. The ICU stuff was solid too.

The metaphors aren't bad, there's always room for improvement though, I think if you get the rhymes down then your verses would be great to read. A few more multi's, starting your next line off of the same rhyme that the previous line ended with, that type of stuff.
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I've never heard this word used in real life, but I think it's pronounced like diss-sen-tary
Haha funny you should say that... I think it may be an english pronunciation thing - we say it more like 'dis-sin-tree' hence why 'missing me' seemed like an okay fit. I forget sometimes how much being british fucks with rapping
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This wasnt bad, flow was good nothing to hard hitting, punch wise, but still decent. I'd say work on coming with some bigger punches and you should be good money... as far beating KJ, it would've depended on the material he came with, because he's pretty good when he show up. cool shit tho
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Your verse was str8, ima comicbook/superhero fans so some of your bars i fuxs wit.
But i think u could have found a more creative why to scheme them tho.

But kj would have gotten u tho..
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